Question

We were on a camping holiday and decided to go for a long hike in the mountains. It was fantastic and I liked it so much.
First me and my friends found a place where we left our tents. This evening we made some food and than we slept. But suddenly I heard a loud roar. Something was trying to get into our tent. Me and my friends were scared. But we remembered that we had a gun. We shot the bear was scared and ran away.
In the morning we packed and continued our hike in the mountain
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Answer 1

В первом абзаце, 2 предложение : напиши лучше не liked, а enjoyed, так красивее звучит.
Во втором абзаце, первое предложение foundED (в прошедшем времени глагол имеет такое окончание). Второе предложение скажи лучше we went to sleep (мы пошли спать, а ты сказал мы спали. В четвёртом предложение лучше скажи не something (что-то), а someone (кто-то), так правильнее. We shot, and the beat was scared, after that he ran away. Скажи так.
Третий абзац : we took all our staff скажи так, вместо we packed. We packed звучит некрасиво.
Вроде все ясно))

Answer 2

We were on a camping holiday and decided to go for a long hike in the mountains. It was fantastic and I liked it so much.

First, my friends and I found a place where we set our tents. That evening we made some food and then we went to sleep. But suddenly, I heard a loud roar. Something was trying to get into our tent. And my friends and I were scared. But we remembered that we had a gun. After that, we shot the bear. He was scared and ran away.

In the morning we packed up and continued our hike in the mountain.