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   The modern
world cannot be imagined without shopping. There are a lot of different shops
in the world. There are famous supermarkets and little shops in the cities. They
sell a variety of goods: fashion clothes, footwear, jewellery, home furnishing,
food, cosmetic and perfume, books, hi-fi, toys and etc.

    To be a customer
you must have money. I often go to the shop to buy the food at the request of
parents, paying in cash. Sometimes I go to the shop to buy the expensive
things. It can be a laptop, phone or game console.  I look about for a long time buying these things;
ask a lot of questions to the consultant. In this case, I pay with a credit
card. I prefer the large network of shops, because there are very small chances
of fraud in them. Sometimes I go to the cinemas, museums and attractions, where
I spend money buying tickets.

In my opinion the ideal buyer must be not rude man who
respects consultant’s help. I see ideal consultant not too pushy but ready to
help at any time.

Answer 1

Лучше There are lots of different shops in the world.
Fashionable clothes тоже сказать будет лучше.
I look about for a long time buying these things - I look for a long time on the thing when I am buying it.
Я бы еще убрал в конце второго абзаца where I spend money buying tickets.
А так все остальное хорошо, молодец!
Пожалуйста