Question

ПРОШУ ПОМОГИТЕ ИСПРАВИТЬ ОШИБКИ ПО АНГЛИЙСКОМУ В СОЧИНЕНИИ КОТОРОЕ Я СОСТАВИЛА !
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Has technology become such a big part of your life that existing without it now seems impossible ? In answering this question , many would answer yes and I fully agree with their opinion , because nowadays it is very important to be able to quickly contact the person .
I , in turn, can no longer live without the Internet. Computer work takes up most of my time. Thanks to the computer I can read books, get the necessary information for me , play games , also I can quickly connect with people and continue to communicate on the Internet.
For billions of people around the world, the Internet has become an essential component of their everyday 
social and business lives. Internet greatly simplifies the lives of people . People are not necessarily going to the library for the book, because we can read it on the Internet. People are not necessarily to buy CDs with your favorite music, because we can also listen to it on the Internet .
Of course, working with a computer in many ways brings harm to the body . But technology become such a big part of your life that existing without it now seems impossible.

Answer 1

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